Guest guest Posted May 17, 2006 Report Share Posted May 17, 2006 >> ...just as a holy river like Sarasvati allows herself to be >> worshiped simply by taking a little of her water and offering it >> back to her, so this book is an offering of Sarasvati to >> Sarasvati... >> >> Here, "so" is presumably unnecessary. But might it be best to >> retain it, considering that the clause it introduces is separated >> by quite a few words from "just"? > >how about this with 12 less words: > >...just as the holy Sarasvati River is worshiped with simple >offerings of her own water, this book is an offering of Sarasvati to >Sarasvati... The parts don't match. They're not parallel. As X is worshiped, Y is an offering. You could say: Just as one worships Sarasvati with simple offerings of her own water, I worship Sarasvati with this book, [which comes from her, however you want to say it]. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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