Guest guest Posted November 16, 2006 Report Share Posted November 16, 2006 Jagadisa visited Mayapur with his friend Sri Vaikunthanatha Ghosal Bhakti Tattva Vacaspati, who was a court pandita of the Maharaja of Tripura and follower of Srila Bhaktivinoda Thakura who had first glorified the Thakura and Sri Siddhanta Sarasvati to Jagadisa. Might the above convey that Vaikunthanatha was one of several followers of Srila Bhaktivinoda who had first glorified the Thakura and Sri Siddhanta Sarasvati to Jagadisa? Is "a" needed before "follower"? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest guest Posted November 17, 2006 Report Share Posted November 17, 2006 At 08:43 PM 11/15/2006 -0500, Bhakti Vikasa Swami wrote: >Jagadisa visited Mayapur with his friend Sri Vaikunthanatha Ghosal Bhakti >Tattva Vacaspati, who was a court pandita of the Maharaja of Tripura and >follower of Srila Bhaktivinoda Thakura who had first glorified the Thakura >and Sri Siddhanta Sarasvati to Jagadisa. > I think there are too many personages in this sentence for the reader to easily keep them straight. I suggest . . . Jagadisa visited Mayapur with his friend Sri Vaikunthanatha Ghosal Bhakti Tattva Vacaspati. He was one of the Maharaja of Tripura's court panditas and the follower of Srila Bhaktivinoda Thakura who had first told Jagadisa about the glories of the Thakura and Sri Siddhanta Sarasvati. >Might the above convey that Vaikunthanatha was one of several followers of >Srila Bhaktivinoda who had first glorified the Thakura and Sri Siddhanta >Sarasvati to Jagadisa? > >Is "a" needed before "follower"? > You really need "the". see above. dd Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest guest Posted November 18, 2006 Report Share Posted November 18, 2006 > At 08:43 PM 11/15/2006 -0500, Bhakti Vikasa Swami wrote: > > >Jagadisa visited Mayapur with his friend Sri Vaikunthanatha Ghosal Bhakti > >Tattva Vacaspati, who was a court pandita of the Maharaja of Tripura and > >follower of Srila Bhaktivinoda Thakura who had first glorified the > >Thakura and Sri Siddhanta Sarasvati to Jagadisa. > > > > I think there are too many personages in this sentence for the reader to > easily keep them straight. I suggest . . . > > Jagadisa visited Mayapur with his friend Sri Vaikunthanatha Ghosal Bhakti > Tattva Vacaspati. He was one of the Maharaja of Tripura's court panditas > and the follower of Srila Bhaktivinoda Thakura who had first told Jagadisa > about the glories of the Thakura and Sri Siddhanta Sarasvati. Should Maharaja be plural? .... one of the Maharajas of... Or He was a Maharaja of... Or was he a court pandit, as indicated in the original above? Or "He was a Maharaja among Tripura's court Pandits...." Instead of "the follower" what about "a follower" because 'the' suggests only one follower whereas 'a' indicates more than one as was the case. Is this clearer: "Jagadisa visited Mayapur with his friend Sri Vaikunthanatha Ghosal Bhakti Tattva Vacaspati. The latter was a pandit in Maharaja Tripura's court and a follower of Srila Bhaktivinoda Thakura. It was Vaikunthanatha who first told Jagadisa about the glories of the Thakura and Sri Siddhanta Sarasvati." The above seems easier to read and comprehend, but is it what the author is intending? ys ad > >Might the above convey that Vaikunthanatha was one of several followers > >of Srila Bhaktivinoda who had first glorified the Thakura and Sri > >Siddhanta Sarasvati to Jagadisa? > > > >Is "a" needed before "follower"? > > > > You really need "the". see above. > > dd > Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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